Dark Wings - Discussion

Alblaka · Jun 26th 2012

Link to story.
It's a 10-page novel probably showing up similaritys to TDC (though it doesn't have any direct link to the plot, except for the fact it's taking place in Darakeyn).

Wrote it based on a sudden inspiration yesterday night, from 21:00 to 00:30 :3

Since I've got your attention right now, either way:
Be advised the story "Dark Wing" is not as "gory" as TDC (if you even considered it something along that line), but is much more dramatic and could cause more sentimental beings to become depressed or even burst into tears. Read on own danger.

FarFarAway · Jun 29th 2012

I really liked the story. Especially the time jumps make it really moving and interesting while giving an idea, why the events are happening exactly like this. I had found it interesting if there were no names at all, atleast not for the protagonists. The first two chapters are really mysterious and somewhat even more interesting then the rest. Even though this may be due to my Bastion addiction, that tells the story exactly like this *gg*. In any way, good job!

Farfar

Alblaka · Jun 29th 2012

Hehe, thanks for the constructive feedback.

Ye, I considered leaving the names out, as well, but at some point it just wouldn't have been feasible anymore. F.e. in the last scene where she asks him directly to "Snap out of it" and calls out to him... without actually calling his name this wouldn't even sound half as impressive.
As well, while it's quickly obvious that Kelda is the one fighting, the fact she is fighting Sykes isn't confirmed until the last scene (though it gets progressively more clear along the story, which is full intention).

Glad you liked the story :3

What is this "Bastion" you're talking about? Manga/Novel/Webcomic?

FarFarAway · Jun 29th 2012

Bastion is an award winning Indie Game by supergiant games. Was even in the humble indie Bundle. Its a hack an Slash top view story focused thingy with a narrators voice and soundtrack everyone everywhere wants to make love to

And indeed, the last scene wouldnt really make a difference from the rest without names : /

FarFar

NuclearStudent · Jul 1st 2012

The sudden inclusion of a name really made that last scene stand out.

Alblaka · Jul 2nd 2012

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The sudden inclusion of a name really made that last scene stand out.

Glad it worked out as intended :3

NuclearStudent · Jul 2nd 2012

I kinda wanted a happy ending, but this is okay too.....

Alblaka · Jul 2nd 2012

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I kinda wanted a happy ending, but this is okay too.....

Je, but if you only get happy endings everywhere, you start valueing them less and less :O

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